{ MASTERING BREVITY IN 10 SYLLABLES }
I used to love to walk in the grass in the rain when I was a child. It feels so good to have the wet grass between my toes. Nothing like barefoot in summer. And to leap -- I like that thought as well. It makes me smile! Nice poem here, Kelvin.
This poem works perfectly for this week's weather.
You truly mastered brevity - what a vital piece!
Leap, I love the imagery ~ On my side of the world, too much rain ha ~ Hello Kelvin ~
You nailed it - well penned :D
I need to go out barefoot and feel wet grass on my feet. Indeed I remember doing this, and I can feel the tingle on my toes.
Love every word - could feel myself leap with you :)
Ah! Memories of days before ticks and Lyme disease!
such delight!!...lovely Kelvin....
It conjures an event that brought an unexpected opportunity! Great, Kelvin!Hank
Interesting form Kabayan. You have perfectly describe to joy of dancing in the rain. In 10 syllables.
Brilliant minimalist poem. Makes a haiku seem so wordy. Great work!
Yikes! Right on.ZQ
Your poem made me want to make a similar leap. But that would be dangerous. Smiles.
See this makes me think barefoot.Which is about the best way to go.and leaps, take faith.So be great indeed.Ha.
I love the way you visually presented this and the brevity of using the 10 syllables....quite a challenge and well done as it evokes our senses....
I love the joy in this.
Very nicely written, Kelvin! I do enjoy the feeling of wet grass in the summer.
Really like this form...and you work it so well.
makes me want to walk barefoot in the summer rain..feel it between my toes..
Summer green is well captured
I've never seen this form before..it intrigues me. What inspired you to choose brevity over other medium to express yourself?
I can see these great feet and leap... to change, to summer, to new life! Great mood here in the short form!
I used to love to walk in the grass in the rain when I was a child. It feels so good to have the wet grass between my toes. Nothing like barefoot in summer. And to leap -- I like that thought as well. It makes me smile! Nice poem here, Kelvin.
ReplyDeleteThis poem works perfectly for this week's weather.
ReplyDeleteYou truly mastered brevity - what a vital piece!
ReplyDeleteLeap, I love the imagery ~ On my side of the world, too much rain ha ~ Hello Kelvin ~
ReplyDeleteYou nailed it - well penned :D
ReplyDeleteI need to go out barefoot and feel wet grass on my feet. Indeed I remember doing this, and I can feel the tingle on my toes.
ReplyDeleteLove every word - could feel myself leap with you :)
ReplyDeleteAh! Memories of days before ticks and Lyme disease!
ReplyDeletesuch delight!!...lovely Kelvin....
ReplyDeleteIt conjures an event that brought an unexpected opportunity! Great, Kelvin!
ReplyDeleteHank
Interesting form Kabayan.
ReplyDeleteYou have perfectly describe to joy of dancing in the rain. In 10 syllables.
Brilliant minimalist poem. Makes a haiku seem so wordy. Great work!
ReplyDeleteYikes! Right on.
ReplyDeleteZQ
Your poem made me want to make a similar leap. But that would be dangerous. Smiles.
ReplyDeleteSee this makes me think barefoot.
ReplyDeleteWhich is about the best way to go.
and leaps, take faith.
So be great indeed.
Ha.
I love the way you visually presented this and the brevity of using the 10 syllables....quite a challenge and well done as it evokes our senses....
ReplyDeleteI love the joy in this.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely written, Kelvin! I do enjoy the feeling of wet grass in the summer.
ReplyDeleteReally like this form...and you work it so well.
ReplyDeletemakes me want to walk barefoot in the summer rain..feel it between my toes..
ReplyDeleteSummer green is well captured
ReplyDeleteI've never seen this form before..it intrigues me. What inspired you to choose brevity over other medium to express yourself?
ReplyDeleteI can see these great feet and leap... to change, to summer, to new life! Great mood here in the short form!
ReplyDelete